I liked the way you brought in reality and time into your Tanka and how things have correlation. It was interesting and interactive the way everything rhymed, but it all made sense. The last part will really stick with me.
I liked your use of rhyme in the poem. It gave the poem more flow but I thought it didn't make much sense and was ore focused on the rhyme aspect than the poem itself.
The last two lines are stumbling blocks for me...I thought the first line really invited me in. As someone who's currently in a state of worry, I would agree that it's tough fear...I like the way that line unfolds. Also, I think the second line is super clever as well. The word adhere has me thrown a bit, and I just can't seem to get my brain around it...help me out by replying to this comment and explaining what your intention was with the word adhere?
This poem is really well written, and I liked how you rhymed, because it allowed the reader to pick up and grasp what you were saying. I also like how when reading this I felt like this was the truth and something a lot of people could relate to, great job!
I liked how your poem talks about how everyone is living in reality and theres no way to deny it and how a huge percentage of the population listens to and believes everything they hear. Very deep, Nice job =) [Supreme]
This poem came out to me more as a rhyme, and it fit it all together like a puzzle! Everyone goes through peer pressure especially when the decision is the wrong thing to do. It can be read in different point of views, and many people relate to it. I like this poem, great job!
I like how you talked about reality, which is what we live in, and gives deep insight into humans, and how you were able to turn something so complicated into a simple poem.
James i love this poem i love the rhymes and how it seems like you put a lot of thought into it and how i know that your talking about earth without saying "earth" amazing job keep it up
"reality has changed my life" This peom was the definition of reality and the poem was really intense tis sounds like something they would say in the matrix or something like reality is not real or something. The poem is good
I liked the way you brought in reality and time into your Tanka and how things have correlation. It was interesting and interactive the way everything rhymed, but it all made sense. The last part will really stick with me.
ReplyDeleteI liked your use of rhyme in the poem. It gave the poem more flow but I thought it didn't make much sense and was ore focused on the rhyme aspect than the poem itself.
ReplyDeleteThe last two lines are stumbling blocks for me...I thought the first line really invited me in. As someone who's currently in a state of worry, I would agree that it's tough fear...I like the way that line unfolds. Also, I think the second line is super clever as well. The word adhere has me thrown a bit, and I just can't seem to get my brain around it...help me out by replying to this comment and explaining what your intention was with the word adhere?
ReplyDeleteThis poem is really well written, and I liked how you rhymed, because it allowed the reader to pick up and grasp what you were saying. I also like how when reading this I felt like this was the truth and something a lot of people could relate to, great job!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your poem because it gives an insight on what life really is and also talks about things nobody really thinks about.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your poem talks about how everyone is living in reality and theres no way to deny it and how a huge percentage of the population listens to and believes everything they hear. Very deep, Nice job =) [Supreme]
ReplyDeleteThis poem came out to me more as a rhyme, and it fit it all together like a puzzle! Everyone goes through peer pressure especially when the decision is the wrong thing to do. It can be read in different point of views, and many people relate to it. I like this poem, great job!
ReplyDeleteI like how you talked about reality, which is what we live in, and gives deep insight into humans, and how you were able to turn something so complicated into a simple poem.
ReplyDeleteJames i love this poem i love the rhymes and how it seems like you put a lot of thought into it and how i know that your talking about earth without saying "earth" amazing job keep it up
ReplyDeleteThis is really true and i like how you rhymed your words together
ReplyDelete"reality has changed my life" This peom was the definition of reality and the poem was really intense tis sounds like something they would say in the matrix or something like reality is not real or something. The poem is good
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