Brittany's Poem:
Cat and Mouse
We sit here afraid
Afraid of what
We have become
Some walking with no father
No mother
No sister
No brother
No place they can call home,
Afraid of what people may think,
What the world may think of them.
They're like that little mouse
Hiding
In a hole from a cat that won't quit
Teasing…
Because people are taken over by their
Selfish Generosity.
Words ones heart can only say,
In a fight with their heads,
Only to be
Defeated by the selfishness of their mind.
Selfishness...
That bullet from a gun
YOU pulled the trigger on.
A bullet to the heart can kill.
Sounds like you never knew that...
That
Perfection is the one thing that is
Impossible to reach.
Perfection is that last cookie on the plate
That you really wanted when you were
Five
But you can't reach it...
Don't ask me I don't know why,
Why We try so hard to be perfect.
Why we run into a bathroom stall
Crying
Because someone thinks you are a "waste of a human being"
Yes, this world is the scariest hunted house to walk through.
But, don't close your eyes because your scared
Open your eyes because your different
See, we can't be compared.
She's the mouse, he's the cat
She's the cat, he's the mouse.
The wall that divides us will never be torn down
Unless we make a decision…
Selfish Generosity.
Words ones heart can only say,
In a fight with their heads,
Only to be
Defeated by the selfishness of their mind.
Selfishness...
That bullet from a gun
YOU pulled the trigger on.
A bullet to the heart can kill.
Sounds like you never knew that...
That
Perfection is the one thing that is
Impossible to reach.
Perfection is that last cookie on the plate
That you really wanted when you were
Five
But you can't reach it...
Don't ask me I don't know why,
Why We try so hard to be perfect.
Why we run into a bathroom stall
Crying
Because someone thinks you are a "waste of a human being"
Yes, this world is the scariest hunted house to walk through.
But, don't close your eyes because your scared
Open your eyes because your different
See, we can't be compared.
She's the mouse, he's the cat
She's the cat, he's the mouse.
The wall that divides us will never be torn down
Unless we make a decision…
This world is yours.
Do what you may
Open the doors
You are NOT the prey
You can hide like a mouse, or fight like a dog.
But, don't hide yourself
Like that little mouse in a hole
Hiding
From the cat who won't quit
Do what you may
Open the doors
You are NOT the prey
You can hide like a mouse, or fight like a dog.
But, don't hide yourself
Like that little mouse in a hole
Hiding
From the cat who won't quit
I like how you are very encouraging people to stand up and show who they really are. The one thing is that you could have done a better job tying this into yourself
ReplyDeleteYour poem was one of the best that Iv'e heard so far. It was filled with passion. Theres no other way to describe it. Great Job!
ReplyDeletei liked your poem because it rhymed and also it showed how you have to stand up for yourself and be brave.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was really good because you used a lot of literary devices that helped someone to see that you were passionate and cared about what you wrote.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very powerful poem. It gave a very good message about how people shouldn't take things so hard but they should also be themselves and not hide from problems. It tells you to be confident I think.
ReplyDeletethis poem was good because it talked about people hiding but you making the choice to not be like them and be diffrent from everybody else which is good
ReplyDeleteI really love how you mentioned [This is what i think] that you should not be affected by others and their words and that YOU are not the victim and you can stand up for yourself. This is really beautiful and the words seemed very powerful. Nice job <3
ReplyDeleteThat was a really good poem Brittany. I could tell that you put a load of work into writing it, so good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! The analogies really helped add depth and meaning to your point. The collage helped the audience take your words in. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteThis was a great poem. I though you presented it very well, and it had a great message. This poem was inspiring and motivational, I think you did a great job on it. I hope you write much more poetry because you are really good at it!
ReplyDeleteThis poem shows the idea of perfection in a new light it was really good poem I liked how you asked question in the poem.
ReplyDeleteBrittany, this poem was A-MA-ZING! I love how you wrote a poem about something that a lot of people can relate to because nobody is perfect, and we all try to be perfect. I love this poem, and the way you presented it added a much deeper meaning to it because of the power in your voice. Awesome poem Brittany!
ReplyDeleteI found myself wondering if I am mouse or cat or dog, and thinking that perhaps I am all of them--a beautiful, complicated beign. Can we be all three? Like in that Sandra Cisneros poem that I mentioned earlier, "Eleven" can different animals rattle around inside of us? I like to think so.
ReplyDeleteWow Brittany! This was such a good poem that a lot of people can relate to because perfection lives everywhere. I loved how you compared it to a cat and a mouse, it made me think of Tom and Jerry. You portrayed a sense of anger which was so amazingly strong and fierce. I really enjoyed how you presented it and I think that you are such a good writer. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteBrittany, your poem is amazing! I loved how you used a small example which is the cat and the mouse, and personified it to a human perspective with all of the gun violence that is in many dangerous parts of our world. Additionally, I also thought of the movie Zootopia when you said "You are NOT the prey", and throughout the poem I also thought of the show Tom and Jerry. Overall, great poem!
ReplyDeleteBrittany, first off, this is one of my favorite poems. I like how your poem has the constant metaphor of a cat and a mouse. I think a lot of people can relate to what you're writing about, trying to achieve the unachievable goal of perfection. It was written beautiful and I could connect to what you were writing about. It also took a lot of bravery to share this with the class but I'm happy you did. I also liked the beat you read the poem with, great job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was cool and I liked how it was about the separation between people and how you need to stand up for what is right. the cat and mouse idea is good metaphor and how you have to change in order to stand up.
ReplyDeleteBrittany, this poem was fire! Everyone can connect to this poem especially me. The way you compared this to a cat and mouse game fit the poem perfectly and helped to create an image in the listener's mind. I really admire you for saying this because not everyone can do that. You choose to praise the differences among people instead of looking at how people are different and separated. Great job.
ReplyDeletewow this was really good i love how you talk about this idea of perfection and how it doesn't exist
ReplyDeleteBrittany, this poem was amazing and eye-opening. The metaphor of the cat and mouse fit in really well with the poem. The poem shows how the goal of perfection is impossible to reach and I think that you are really brave to be able to go up and present such a personal poem. I think the pictures that you included went well with your poem. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteWOW Brittany, this poem was truly amazing. It talks about issues and problems that many people in the world are facing. I love how you compared the harsh relationship between people like a cat and a mouse. Just by reading it I can tell how passionate you are about this topic, this was amazing, excellent job!
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