Lucy's Poem: My Decision
My Decision
I fell into the trap of defeat.
My mind a swirling mess
of negativity.
I was at life’s overhang
Found only by people who know
Hate.
From others
yourself
Your mind.
I was facing the unlocked
Gates of hell which were
Welcoming me
with the open arms
I wanted
to take hold of.
I was hesitant
To turn away.
The biggest decision.
The two sides
Were struggling to tear me apart
But I was trapped
Like a prisoner in shackles
Banging on the bars
Screaming silently
Making a decision.
The one I knew would be
Wrong.
They would look in on me
I would laugh
But it was a mask.
A lie.
I shoved my feelings down my throat
Adding to the hidden lump
I wanted to cry
I wanted to cry the endless tears
Of seasons.
I wanted to believe
That this way
they could stand
In my shoes.
But
I’m different.
I knew
I had to make
A decision.
I don't know why
My words cut through
my own skin.
I don't know why
I fell to the
ground.
I don't know why
I didn’t reach
out.
And I thought
There was only one way
To get the lump
out
of my throat.
It all came down
To me.
My
Decision.
I’m finding hands
That can guide me
Lift me off
The ground.
I’m realizing
I’m not alone.
I’m realizing
I’m not alone
Ever.
I’m not
Alone
In thinking
About making
The worst decision
Someone can make.
You’re
Not
alone.
your poem was very long but good,i didnt really undertand what it was about so i was kind of confused.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was very strong and powerful. I feel like you really got the point out that no one is ever alone. I can relate to the feelings that you expressed through your writing. I think you did a great job at presenting your poem to the class, you seemed nervous but your confidence overpowered that.
ReplyDeleteLucy- I had no idea that you felt this way about yourself. You are such an amazing person and you should not have to be afraid. We are always here for you. This poem was so amazing, yet I can not relate to you because I don't think suicidal thoughts... It is scary to think I could lose one of my best friends after all these years... This poem was overall really really thought through and I know it was hard to memorize but yo did an amazing job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is amazing, Lucy! I have never heard such a spoken word poem as creative as yours so far, and I love how you create a dramatic scene that isn't over exaggerated, but still depicts a dark picture of bad decisions that have been made over the years. Additionally, I loved that you exposed all of your feelings and description out in the poem to make it lively at the same time. At the end of the day, this poem is great!
ReplyDeleteYour poem was amazing. It was well-written and had a lot of thought put into it. I think that it's really brave of you to share something like this with the class, and this is clearly something that you have struggled with for what seems some time now. I really like this poem because it shows how you were able to see that people are there to help you, and that you really aren't alone. Overall, wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this Lucy, it gave us personal insight on your feelings and personally, is really relatable, i understand what you mean about the decision and you're right. i understand in wanting to make that decision and honestly i'm struggling with the same things as you. This poem really reached out to me and personally just means a lot that you would spend the time to write something like this and making others in this situation not alone.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was very interesting I kind of seemed to me like you were not the brink of seucide and were still able to pull yourself out of your dark place.This poem is really powerful because alot of people are in places similar to yours and need to pull themselves out of it.
ReplyDeletethis poem really talks about what was had in your life and all of the bad things that you have went through. my question is that i was confused on what your topic of the poem is
ReplyDeleteLucy, this was amazing! You present it with such emotion that it really knocked my socks off. There is so much to unpack and it all was a big confusion, which helped me into your shoes. Your collage went perfectly with your poem and you portrayed such emotion through it. I loved all of the metaphors in this poem and I know that you really thought this through. It makes me really want to know more about you because it's kind of a mystery to me. Thank you for taking me into your mind.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem, in this poem I think you express your feelings that I think you do not usually express. It shows a different part of you we do not see, which is your emotions. It shows that you are not always as happy as you show yourself. The tone of the poem was great and it had a lot of great metaphors too, I liked he pauses to add effect to the audience.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this poem, with its great word use and emotional connections to me personally. I really, really liked your tone and emotion when you presented this because I, and I think the rest of the class could really feel your emotion and thought about this. I was engaged in your poem and presentation ll the way through, and I hope you write much more poetry because this was simply amazing.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was amazing! Right from the start, I could tell how you felt when forced to make your decision. Keeping the decision cryptic helped add to the dark, trapped feeling of the poem. Your presentation was great, even though you needed a script. You were able to laugh about that, which really helped lighten the mood and help us see what you felt. Great job!
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I really thought this poem gave an insight to what you're going through implicitly. This means a lot to me that you were brave enough to talk about something so hard to talk about. I feel like you really explained the internal conflict of making the choice to commit suicide. I think some people in this class can connect to what you're saying and how you described it. You made yourself vulnerable, which allowed your audience to really see how much it means to you. I could really see where you're coming from with that and it was so good. (BTW Justin doesn't want to admit it but he almost cried)
ReplyDeleteThis was amazing! Wow, first thank you for sharing this with us, I know it must have been hard, however this was an amazing poem! From how you presented it to how it was written, you had so much confidence in your voice even if you did feel nervous. This poem truly made me feel something, and I got to know more about who you are. I also love the ending and the moral of you are never alone, amazing job!
ReplyDeleteGood job lucy. This poem is very deep and very vivid, as well as relatable for some people and is open for interpretation. Also what was the "Worst decision" you were talking about in the poem
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DeleteLucy, I had no idea you felt this way. You are a brave and amazing person. This poem was so amazing and I was touched by your poem. I could relate to your poem because I felt like this before, and my poem is also about this topic as well. You are so strong and brave that you held back, and it was a hard decision. When I heard your poem, I was scared, and worried, and I felt how you felt. I like how you put a smile on your face and stay strong throughout the school year, and hide your feelings. I hope you feel better and stay strong! This poem was amazing!
ReplyDeleteI wish I could be as brave and confident as you are. You are an amazing person, and even though we aren't close, I want to get to know you better, and I hope you feel better. Stay strong Lucy!
DeleteThe poem overalls was really good. I loved how at the end of your poem you kind of brought it back to one central point that "You're not alone" and I think that's very powerful and amazing when you can bring your poem back to an idea.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was very emotional and it had a deep meaning and showed me a side of you that i didnt know. This really was a great way to show yourself and all the problems that are happening with you. How you said that you had to make a choice that would change your life. i can also tell that this had a lot of meaning to you because you were really in to it and expressive.
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ReplyDeleteIn the poem it talked about making a decision and the decisions you have to make during your life can sometimes be a life or death situation. decision making is hard because you want to make people happy but you wnat to do the best for yourself and if it means doing something other people dont want you to do thats where it hits you and you struggle. this poem was very strong and it shows people what it feels like to make a decision, especially if is close to you. you also show what it feels like to make a decision and what you feel like after. Your poem was really good and it was very relatable especially during school and the decisions that make you do well or bad.
ReplyDeleteLucy, your poem was great! Your deliverance of the poem was really good and showed all the emotions that you wanted the poem to convey. This poem is obviously about problems that you face in life and it made me want to get to know you better. It also made me want to know what decision you had to make and why it was so difficult. Overall, this poem was amazing, great job!
ReplyDeleteLucy, you poem was extremely powerful and full of figurative language. I have great sympathy for what you wrote about, sometimes you make huge mistakes and you don't know why. I now understand that you have struggles like everyone else. I just want to say that you don't need to hide your sadness or negativity and we as a class will help you through the hard times (even though i know that we are not close friends but we are still a family). Be yourself because you are a great person and i want you to feel safe expressing yourself whether it's positively or negatively. I could really relate to this poem and i think everyone can. I love it. Fabulous job.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this Lucy, it gave us personal insight on your feelings and personally, is really relatable, i understand what you mean about the decision and you're right. i understand in wanting to make that decision and honestly i'm struggling with the same things as you. This poem really reached out to me and personally just means a lot that you would spend the time to write something like this and making others in this situation not alone.
ReplyDeleteOh. My. God. That poem was breath taking, literally. I think this really made people see you in a different way. I did not know you felt this way, but I am proud of you for getting up there and talking about how you feel. But, it makes me sad to hear that you don't talk to anyone about this. You are a really brave girl, your strong, and nice. I wish this wasn't happening to you, but I know you're strong and you know how to conceal and release these feelings the way you did. It also showed me that people really do hide things that they need to get out. Do you feel like this poem relieved you in some way? It felt like this poem was written by a person who's feelings were trapped inside and you just wanted to get those feelings out. I know writing, for me, helps me get rid of negative thoughts or anything. But, this poem had a really weird (good weird) feeling. It was as if I was in your head and listening to everything you're thinking. It's a little sad because this gave me a picture of someone trapped somewhere banging on a wall trying to get out. I don't know if that was the feeling you were looking for, but I like the poem either way. You really did a good job at expressing how you feel. Nice Work!
ReplyDeleteWow that was really good I'm sorry that you feel this way but I'm glad you were able to express this into an amazing poem
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