Sam's Poem: Crack
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Crack!
Crack!
The 32 inch black mako beast hits the white ball
The two different worlds of pitcher and batter collide
There's a moment of silence
A moment where all eyes are no longer on me
Nor on my teammates
Not even on the other team
All eyes are on the white ball
Flying through the air
All attention is on the single white ball.
The ball that will determine the future of our team
The ball flies like a hawk
It soars over the field
Over my teammates
And over the other team’
Perfect.
That’s what it was, from the wind,
To the sun, and the clouds.
It was almost as if,
The wind carried the ball for me.
If only I could get the attention that,
the ball got.
A spotlight like I was an actor.
Just for one more day,
I want to be like the one signing autographs.
Happily hitting the ball.
Cause’ I know Ken could kill the ball.
When you hit the ball 500ft to dead center you feel like Dunn.
A bomb is hit to left and you're trying to gun someone at home at throw a
rocket like Cespedes.
My A2k, why don’t they call it an A2000 aren’t
they the same thing?
And what is the hype over the CF ZEN, and the Mako Beast?
Aren’t they all the same thing?
Don’t they all have 1.15BPF? One could call it a trampoline, the larger the
trampoline the farther it will go.
Trying to throw a strike from 250ft away because the BPF is
a little over 1.15 isn’t fair.
The opposing team so thirsty they’ll drink a lake, when it’s bases
loaded 2 outs, count is 3 in 2.
Slide step for the pitcher, batter is kind of off line.
Good Connection wrong direction, make the correction.
The batter knows what’s coming, fastball right in the zone
Crack, the bat speed must’ve been high 70s, the ball is gone.
I love how you wrote about something YOU love it really showed us how much you love your sport and it seems like you put a lot of time into it. Nice job =)
ReplyDeleteThe poem was good in general, but you could have done a better job explaining certain things
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and I think it had a metaphor showing how you felt about what others thought of you but you tied it to the baseball and bats I think.
ReplyDeleteGreat job. You expressed your love for baseball throughout your poem and you explained how you feel about specific aspects of baseball. Baseball seems to be a huge part of your life.
ReplyDeleteRight away I knew this poem was made by Sam. I really liked how you used terms like BPF that only property who play baseball know. The poem felt really personal to you, which is what made it great. The rhythm and Tobe was great. So great work!!!!
ReplyDeleteYour poem was very unique and had many terms that I didnt know of. Overall it expressed your personality through a sport. Good job
ReplyDeleteSavannah: I think this poem expressed your identity well and how you feel about baseball. I liked the onomatopoeia you used and how you kind of put us there in the game with how you described a game. Overall, I thought it was good and even though I don't know a lot about baseball I learned a little more about the game.
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DeleteSam. I love love love that you wrote about baseball! I like how you talked about what the crowd sees. While I was reading it, I was wandering what would happen next...and then a Grand slam happened! I liked how there was so much stress and anticipation before the grand slam. I think on a full count, a grand slam is a miracle. Great job!
ReplyDeleteIt absolutely expressed your personality, how much you understand baseball, and how much you love baseball.
DeleteSam, your poem was very unique and personal to you. Even though I didn't understand all the baseball terms I think they showed a different part of your identity. It showed the listener how passionate you are about the sport that you play. Great Job!!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! I know you expressed doubts about how it would sound, but it turned out great! I can tell how much you like baseball by how you describe the action of a game and talk about the different terminology. Good job!
ReplyDeleteAwesome I love how you brought in something that only you know about it expresses your identity through something you love awesome job
ReplyDeleteSam, your poem is excellent! I loved how you described being at your baseball park and used many literary and poetic devices such as hyperbole ("The opposing team so thirsty they'll drink a lake" is an excellent example) and personification ("The wind carried the ball for me.") I also enjoyed the lively and enthusiastic mood in this poem, as it added to the action of the baseball game. I also thought of your poem getting lots of inspiration of Quinn's poem, mainly because both included sports and had lots of action and pace in them.
ReplyDeleteThis poem shows a lot about baseball which all it seems you talk about so i beloved that this poem was most likely easy for you because you know so much about it
ReplyDeleteThis poem shows a lot about your personal identity and interest outside of school. I love how you used onomatopoeia to put the reader in the position of you. This really explored who you are and your personal interest, great job!
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