Sasha's Poem: Arbitrary
Arbitrary
Out the womb November 3rd 2003
To this day I am 13 years old
Still a child, with no knowledge of the real world
(pause)
Just do what you're told
With an arbitrary complexity such as to be successful and dedicated
All for the future but still wanting to live in the present
All for love but made for hatred
Just a child in a cruel world
Holding on to clarity
Holding on to hope
Given purpose but lost to fear
Given spirit but crushed by melancholy
Just a broken child
Split by heartbreak and disrespect
Like a tornado touched down my heart
Pieces put together like a puzzle but forever spread apart
Formality of Happiness mended
Fixation of the soul to insure security
A levee Holding on strong
Not allowing to be broken down like building blocks
Now is the time to rise
brighter than burning hydrogen into helium
To be stronger than Kent
smarter than Hawking
my own person
And whatever you say, I really don't care
Because as justin says “Only God can judge me”
i liked you poem abut being strong throught the hard times and i like how there was alot of big words but i didnt know any of them
ReplyDeleteyour poem didnt really make sense to me and i didnt rally understand what you where talking about.
ReplyDeleteGood job Sasha. I thought that your poem was really well written, and I could tell that you put a lot of work into writing it, so ggood job!
ReplyDeleteI like how you had the last line because it shows how you dont care about what others think and i honestly have nothing else to say besides its a great poem, nice job <3
ReplyDeletewow this was really good i love how you brought in this topic that is very personal to you and that many can connect to
ReplyDeleteThis was really great! I loved how you were writing your own inspirational story in front of our eyes. It spoke to me and I think that you wrote it very smoothly. I also love that you are striving for more and it gave a very fiery touch to the poem. The last line was really good also.
ReplyDeleteThis was a great poem. It really showed your experiences and story of the earlier years of your life, and I think you presented it very well. I, and I think most of the class can relate to the pain and agony of divorce on such a young person. Your poem was excellent, and I hope to read more of your poetry one day, excellent work!
ReplyDeleteYour story reminds me a bit of Meygan's experience of her parents' divorce--thank you for sharing about a hard part of your life. You had a couple of really great poetic moments--"brighter than burning hydrogen," and "stronger than Kent, smarter than Hawkin" stick out to me. I still want more about what feels arbitrary to you--that this happened to you?
ReplyDeleteYour poem was really good. We're close friends but theres still a lot i dont know about you and this poem really gave me some insight on your life. Good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! I like how you added fancy words for whatever arbitrary stuff you could think of. The poem's theme is unusual enough to get attention but not enough to remove meaning from the poem. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem shows alot about how you have grown as person and you have came to where you are to day
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem a lot. It was very good how you showed struggles and how you thought of yourself in the past and present. It was great you compared yourself to people such as Stephen Hawking at the end.
ReplyDeleteAmazing poem Sasha! I never knew you were going through this, and I love how you stayed brave and put a smile on your face everyday when you were going through so much. I can relate to this because when I was very little, my parents divorced, and I never saw my dad. I admire you because you stayed strong, and I encourage you to stay strong. I wanted to say sorry because I have not known about this, and I wish I could've done better. Awesome poem Sasha, and even though we aren't close, this makes me want to get to know you better.
ReplyDeleteI also liked how you were brave enough to share this with the class since it was very personal. I also liked how you came up with the poem title, and the story behind it.
DeleteThe poem was good and talked a lot more about your past then other poems presented and helps us understand a little bit more about you.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem and even though you never said the word divorce in your poem, you created a clear image of it in your poem. I also liked how you had references to people, especially one that you really like. I knew your parents were divorced but I didn't really know how you were taking it personally. Also, in showing the vulnerability you have from your parents' divorce, you show a strength you have that keeps you going. It was super good Sasha and I think there are people that can relate to your poem.
ReplyDeleteSasha, your poem was beautiful. You did a really good job on this poem. It shows that you understand what it is like to be young, you don't know everything that is out there in the world, so all we have to do is listen. The mood of you poem changed when you started talking about doing what you want to do to succeed, I liked it. You just had a lot of different parts to your poem: Being young, how life was when you were little, and what we can do in this world without having people judging and stopping you. Amazing!!!
ReplyDeleteI also liked how you explained your multi-modal component and background information before you started.
DeleteSasha, I loved this poem! I liked how you described yourself and how you had to deal with your parents divorcing together and the way you got through those conflicts early in your life is amazing. Overall, this poem is amazing!
ReplyDeleteSasha, your poem was really beautiful. I loved how you include things in the poem that made it personal to you, like your love for Justin Bieber and Riverdale. Your poem flowed really well and I learned a lot about how your parent's divorce affected you. Great Job :)!!!
ReplyDeleteWow, I love the tittle of this poem, because it is something that a lot of people in our time period can relate to. This was really well written and it flowed really nicely. In this poem you are really unpacking your identity and putting yourself out there, which is something a lot of people can be too scared to do, great job!
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