Untitled by Justin Reynolds
This poem has forever been looked upon for generations through my family and when i'm older will be passed upon into my hands as it did my father. But what is it? It a nice little green tropical dream where people meet at the island to eat and discuss their day and were people fill others heads with the foundations of life and monitor their money. In this dream you will hear the cries and screams of others running through the hallways and at night your hear the sweet lullaby of my mother putting us to sleep and spiderman tick tocking away. But our dream isn't perfect we have our problems we were never treated like the others from being ignored by our neighbors or not being allowed to play sports with the petunia kids we were always the dark shadow in the background, but at times like this we look at our father savior jesus and forgive like he did for us and we think back to MLK and how all he has fought for isn't over and we have to live up to his cause. But still hearing a british accent or an african slain keeps me sane and reminds me that the only thing i can fear is losing this poem of mine this green tropical dream that i hold in my heart and i hope someday just one day i can pass it on to my children and they too will become this dream of mine and my home.
This poem is really good! There is a lot of rhyming which makes the lovely dream of a tropical green really soothing! Additionally, the description about what people do in that dream also adds to the feeling of tropical comfort. Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing i think it is about the racism in some countries and how people woud discriminate to blacks and how they were always thought of as the bad people. It was very good and you hav very good poetic skills.
ReplyDeleteThis poem to me was extremely well delivered and well written, and even though I don't know what the poem is about, it is leaving a trek of excitement in me.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was powerful. It gave me an inside on his life and what he likes t call his ¨home¨. I like hat the poem has no title because it allows the listener to interpret the poem in any way they experience it. Good job!
ReplyDeletegood job Justin i liked your poem and you did a swell job
ReplyDeletePeace- Mr. C
This poem has plenty of descriptive imagery and evokes an image. I had very little in common with the situation described, but the images allowed me to connect with it. Overall, a very good poem!
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you kept repeating "green tropical dream." It kept reminding the audience of its importance throughout the poem.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was very very good and it sounded like it is very meaningful to you and your culture. Next time I think that you could format it more like a poem in stanza form but over all I thought that this poem was AMAZING!
ReplyDeleteI like how you added a personal touch to this poem, and how you added memories that only you would understand. This was a great poem, nice job!
ReplyDeleteThis was a poem that had some visualisation and I thought that this would have connected to the place you were from or where your family lived ivory coast at least I think that is where thy were from.
ReplyDeleteJustin, thank you for sharing your poem. You create an intriguing image of generations of your family--starting with you and your father and concluding with you and your own future children. I was especially interested in this line, "we have our problems we were never treated like the others from being ignored by our neighbors or not being allowed to play sports with the petunia kids we were always the dark shadow in the background." I wonder if this was about discrimination and racial injustice (especially with the reference to "dark shadow" and MLK in the next line), and what "petunia kids" meant. I also wanted to know more about the "green tropical dream" and what that means to you. I'm excited to hear what you told Mr. C in the hallway!
ReplyDeleteLoved hearing your insider thinking about this--deep and compelling stuff. I love that you tackle race and injustice intentionally and critically.
Deletevery nice poem
ReplyDeleteThat was deep
ReplyDeleteIt seems like you put tons of effort into this and it means a lot to you. You express your feelings on your culture and how your people were oppressed. I could really feel all the emotions in this poem. I enjoyed listening your emotions on your home and the people around you.
ReplyDeleteI liked the figurative language you used and how you didn't say what things were in a literal sense and gave good imagery.
ReplyDeleteOnce you explained what each of the things you were talking about were I really understood what you were saying and I liked the insight into your struggles.
DeleteI like how the poem was less focused on home as a physical space, and more of a experience, while still incorporating the things from the workshop, but not to make it super obvious as the poem, and giving an insight into your experences
ReplyDeleteYour poem was really good and I liked how you described your home and how you felt about your home. I also liked how you described how you felt about your neighbors and how there was a lot of figurative language and imagery.
ReplyDeleteI liked how explored certain parts of your culture and identity in your poem. You did a really good job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was AMAZING! I really liked how you connected other people from different generations into your poem! The green dream created a direct image into your poem and it reached out in many different directions. Keep up creating amazing poems and GREAT job!!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is super interesting. You showed great imagery in this, and I could clearly see what you were saying. I really enjoyed listening to the story unfold and I could really see what he was creating. Awesome Job
ReplyDeleteThis poem is really good because it takes me back to yours and my roots considering that it talks about Africa. It's also amazing because you include different parts of time and issues that we have faced and are still facing today.
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