Guinea Pig
Spoken to Guinea Pig
Stop running around, Chrissie
There’s no need to go crazy
Get out of the corner
You usually like stuff like this
Note to self: Guinea pigs don’t like basil
crunch crunch squeak
Don’t hide in your corner, I have food
Stop nibbling your cage bars
Eat your spinach and tomatoes
Your cage could stand some cleaning
No stairs for you?
Fine, I’ll carry you out
And your cage too
Let’s dump out these old shavings --
Stop staring at me and eat some yard.
I enjoyed how you created an image by conducting the poem as if you were speaking to your pet. And your poem was really creative so great job,
ReplyDeleteI like how the poem was spoken to the guinea pig, as it gives more insight on our perspective on pets, when we are usually thinking about what our pets think of us
ReplyDeleteI love how you wrote this like you were talking to your guinea pig and the last part was cool instead of grass you said yard this was awesome nick
ReplyDeleteYou clearly took the time to describe the surroundings and how your guinea pig behaves. I could almost feel the frustration that you were expressing when your guinea pig wouldn't listen. I liked how it was very positive and fun, and overall it was really good!
ReplyDeleteIt was a great idea considering how creative you were writing the poem as if you were talking to your Guinea Pig. It was also great in the descriptions included.
ReplyDeleteIt was really interesting the way you presented your poem like you were talking to your guinea pig. I liked when you made a sound like a guinea pig it was really cool and interactive. Do you still have the guinea pig?
ReplyDeleteThis poem was very interesting! I never seen anything like it. It was special in its own way. I thought it was cool that you spoke in first person. That guinea pig sounds fun to play with. Good figurative language. Good Job Nick!
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem because it helps me connect to your personal life. Also this poem was funny, which is a plus. It can be difficult to write a funny but realistic poem but I think that you nailed it! Your writing is very descriptive and it tells me something about your and your guinea pig´s personality. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI love this poem Nicholas! I like how you explain taking care of your guinea pig in such a way that it seems immersive to me! I've never seen a poem with a second-person style, & to be honest, I love it! I also like how you said eat some yard, which is similart to eating hay, which guinea pigs do eat. Overall, excellent job!
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you presented you poem, it made me feel like you were actually talking to me, and I was the guinea pig. I also liked how you went beyond the usual sense of poetry, and explored something that related to your every day life. You also asked some questions, which kept all of us following along in your point of view. It was really easy to read and bubbly.
ReplyDeleteI like how you took a more fun turn on your poetry, also how while you were reading it you enjoyed it as well. It was a really fun idea to write to a Guinea pig, you were very confident when presenting , great job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy how you wrote this poem as if you were speaking to your guinea pig, and I thought it was really cool how you delivered this poem and the tone you used to do so. Great job Nick!
ReplyDeleteFirst, do you still have Chrissie? Also, I liked how you wrote this poem as if you're talking to your guinea pig ,it seemed almost interactive. Nice job : )
ReplyDeleteNo, I don't.
DeleteI like how you read the poem like you are talking to the guinea pig and what the guinea pig does and says and how your reactions to the guinea pig and how you acted like the guiney pig when you said squeak squeak. from that point of view it seems like guinea pigs are fun and that they can sometimes be stubborn.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was great, it was a very interesting conversation between you and your pet. This poem is very unique , and it was easy to just listen to the conversations you would usually have with your pet. The tone and emphasis you had when presenting made the poem even better. Overall, great work!
ReplyDeleteYour poem was very entertaining and i could tell you have good relationship with your guinea pig and that you would talk to it as if it was very special to you. Its like me i have a dog and i talk to it and my brother thinks im crazy.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was really joyful, and it showed how important Chrissie is to you. I thought it was very interesting how you wrote this in second person as if you were talking to your guinea pig and how you described all the things you do for Chrissie. This poem was very different from most usual poem but it was a good kind of different. It's very out of the ordinary which makes it stand out from all the other poems.
ReplyDeleteI belive this poem is very similar to adams poem when he talks to his dog I think it shows alot of creativity and shows your close realationship with your ginnie pig
ReplyDeleteI found it very interesting how you wrote the poem as if you were speaking to the guinea pig. I thought you could have made it a bit more visually descriptive and less like a dialogue but it still added flow to the poem. I liked how the poem had a tone because of what the guinea pig was doing, which you showed when presenting, it gave it more personality.
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ReplyDeleteI found you poem to be very interesting especially since you wrote it as if you were speaking to your guinea pig which helped create a fantastic image.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you wrote it like a conversation with your guinea pig, especially in how people wouldn't usually talk to their pets. I've never had a guinea pig or hamster or something like that but I could visualize what it was like from your poem. It was a good poem and I really think you conveyed an image with your poem.
ReplyDeletegood job nick
ReplyDeleteThis poem was very different. I really like how you wrote it as if you were talking to your Guinea pig. I didn't even know you had a guinea pig and I felt like I was in the same room as Chrissie. You gave us a great description of it is taking care of your little guinea pig. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteThis poem makes me laugh, because it's quintessentially a Nicholas poem. Your voice shines through the poem, and you let us in to your life, and more importantly, your sense of humor. The dead pan style in your delivery along with the guinea pig special effects added a lot of meaning and interest.
ReplyDeleteYour poem really creates a image of how you treat your guinea pig and interact with it
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This was a different way of writing a poem and it was extremely creative. I enjoyed reading it. It made me feel as if I was Chrissie and you were talking to me. The descriptive words you used made it easy for me to form an image in my head. I never knew that you had a guinea pig so this gave me a little insight into your life.
ReplyDeleteIt was a great idea considering how creative you were writing the poem as if you were talking to your Guinea Pig. It was also great in the descriptions included.
ReplyDeleteI am sorry I could not hear you speak the poem, because I think it would have made a difference than reading it myself! I can relate to this because I have a bunny, but they can climb stairs hahaha. I reay liked how you wrote it as you were talking to your guinea pig, and overall great job!!
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