Amarria's Poem: Amarria
Amarria,
I admire you.
But you have your flaws,
and you aren’t even close to perfect,
but I still love you.
You have your strengths,
and you have your weaknesses,
but I accept that.
You have dreams as big as the sky.
but i know that you won’t reach them,
unless you push yourself further.
You're beautiful
and carry yourself well in that light brown skin of yours,
But remember, good looks won’t get you anywhere in life.
Your intelligent
and could solve any problem handed to you,
just learn to think things through a bit more.
I know that you feel alone
you feel like you're drowning but no one's around to save you
but that’s how it is in the real word,
all you can count on is yourself.
I've seen your tears rush down your face
and I know that you can’t control it,
but keep crying and you will drown in that salty lake you're creating.
Your tough.
you know how to keep a wall up when good times turn bad.
but if you don’t fix the cracks in that wall,
it will fall and you're going to crumble with it.
You hide.
you try to escape reality
but just know, you can’t hide from everything.
your bedroom door is more transparent than you think it is.
Your unpredictable
you can go off at any moment like a bull.
just... try not go off at the wrong time.
You're angry.
mad at the world and everything bad that it's done to you
just remember, you've done yourself wrong a few times as well.
I know that you're lost
lost without the one woman in your life that treated you just as your mother does
just remember, one day you’ll die too and your grandchild will feel the same way.
You're stuck
stuck knowing that the man who you're supposed to look up to,
left you for his new wife
just remember, don’t ever love anyone more than they love you.
Amarria,
You're afraid.
You're afraid that you won’t be accepted.
You're afraid that people will judge you.
You're afraid that sharing this part of your identity makes you weak.
But now they know.

I really how how you made it seem as if someones writing to or youre talking to yourself. it really puts a cool perspective to the poem. Youre really brave for sharing this with us nice job <3
ReplyDeleteI liked how you act like your someone talking t yourself but the beginning came off a little self centered. Its seem like your talking about your personal experiences from a 3rd person point of view in the future.
ReplyDeletethat was very deep ad intense.Also it showed to me how you feel about other people in your life and gave me a new viwe on you
ReplyDeleteGreat poem Amarria! I liked how you wrote your poem as if someone was speaking to you and telling you about how you feel and what you should and should not do. I never knew you held back and put a smile on your face and keep the day as it is. Overall, amazing poem!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poem. The multimodal gave me an understanding of what the poem was meant to express. The poem showed what you think of yourself and what you do to achieve goals.
ReplyDeleteAmarria, your poem is amazing! I loved how you wrote a poem specifically about yourself, and the fact that you handled reading a poem describing yourself in front of your peers is spectacular! Additionally, I also liked how you used multiple devices such as imagery and metaphor to make your point stand out and make it clear that you have something to address in your poem. Overall, this is an excellent poem!
ReplyDeleteThis was a great poem, the wording and emotion in this was super personal to you and the rhythm that you created with the stanzas made the poem and its flow better. I think everyone in this class is happy that you shared this with us, and now we now a little bit more of what makes you, you.
ReplyDeleteAmarria, your poem helped me to know a more delicate side of you and what you think about yourself. I liked the way to made the poem as a letter to yourself. I think that a lot of people can relate to this poem. It was very brave of you to present to the class all of your insecurities, flaws, and self judgment. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI like how you wrote this poem as you are not talking, but someone else is, and how that leaves this poem up for interpretation. Is it your mom?
ReplyDeleteYour poem was although like a lot of other poems in this room, unique and one of the other many poems that were deep and represented you and your identity.
ReplyDeleteThis was fantastic! I loved that this was a letter. Who was it from? I also loved that you really put yourself out there and expressed a lot of things that I didn't know about you. That ending really put perspective on how your world spins and I just loved reading this. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem I liked because it was like you were talking to yourself giving advice and these are guidelines that you have to follow and these are what are going to get you through life. the way the poem is put together is good because it is about you and what goes on in your mind and how it works.
ReplyDeletei liked that you talked about yourelf and it was a poem to yourself and it was god how you talked about the good things and all ofthe bad things
ReplyDeleteWow, thank you so much for sharing, Amarria. I love how well the image matched the content of your poem--in writing, we talk about this as form and function matching. I really like all the positive representations in the beginning of the poem (your exterior self that you present), and then the switch to what could be seen as negative representations toward the conclusion (your interior "hidden" self). What a great representation of the complexity of our identities and representations.
ReplyDeleteAmazing poem! The style of complimenting and critiquing yourself is very different, and I often do the same. Your compliments have more weight than your critiques, which is great. The multi-modal component adds the perfect opinion. Great job!
ReplyDeletewow that was awesome i love your pic it shows that your not who we think you are and i love how you wrote this from 3rd person very cool nice job
ReplyDeleteAmarria, that poem was great. It reminded me of a letter that someone's parent will write to them because parents make sure we love ourselves just as much as they love us. I actually really like your multi-modal component, it matches the mood of the poem. I literally can't think of anything else to say. Your poem was so good!
ReplyDeleteOne more thing, it was like a letter to yourself telling you to accept yourself. Like a self-worth letter.
DeleteThat was a really good poem Amarria. I thought that the perspective in which you presented the poem was really creative, and I could tell that you put a lot of work into this. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteWow Amarria, that was one of my favorite poems so far. I loved how your poem addressed many different aspects of your identity, you didn't talk about just one part of who you are. I didn't know you were struggling with this stuff but this poem showed a new side of you. I also think your poem is relatable for other people while it still has a meaning to you personally. You were really honest in your poem and had a good vulnerability. I also liked how you were talking to yourself in the poem, talking about the positive and the negative things.
ReplyDeleteAmarria, your poem was very personal to you and I feel like I learned a lot about you and your more vulnerable side. I think that it was extremely unique how your poem was like a letter to self. I think that you are really brave to be able to go up and present all your flaws and insecurities to the class. You chose a really good multi-modal component to go with what your poem was conveying. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis poem clearly meant a lot to you it looked to have brought you to tears when reading it. Your poem somehow speaks on real world issues such as the violence in Chicago before you even said it because your experience was enough for the whole poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how you put a perspective as if you were talking to yourself through this poem. This was something very close to you, so I thank you for sharing it with all of us. This poem really unpacked your true identity that a lot of the class has not gotten to see before. This poem was very unique to you and different than any of the other poems I have seen so far, great job!
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